Bonsoir, aidez-moi, s'il vous plait, je vous en supplie. Merci ! Voici le texte (rempli d'erreurs) : ''She approaching more more. I wanted to scream but I could
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Bonsoir, aidez-moi, s'il vous plait, je vous en supplie. Merci !
Voici le texte (rempli d'erreurs) :
''She approaching more more. I wanted to scream but I couldn't. I was fozen on the spot, I couldn't more. For the first time of my life, I was afraid of dying. I wondered if this form was an enormous white shark. But no because so didn't looked like. '' But then, what that could well be ?'' I thought. So much that I was scared, I didn't know : I wanted escape. But water was slowed me. I heard far the movements and the cries of children on the beach : I was already swimming too far. I had only a one choice : do face to face t this thing. I opened greatly my eyes for observe everything around me. When, suddenly, I seen a big white dolphin. It following me. Surprise, I rushed on the beach. ''
1) Corriger grammaticalement ce texte (oubli/ordre des mots, forme verbale adéquate...)
- la forme verbale adéquate,
- utiliser le prétérit simple à bon escient,
- utiliser le prétérit Be-ing à bon escient.
2) Ajouter au texte le superlatif et les subordonnées en When/While.
3) Corriger les phrases qui sont mal formées et la ponctuation/majuscules.
4) Ajouter des phrases en ménageant du suspense ou de l'humour pour rendre ce texte intéressant.
PS : En échange 25 points !
Voici le texte (rempli d'erreurs) :
''She approaching more more. I wanted to scream but I couldn't. I was fozen on the spot, I couldn't more. For the first time of my life, I was afraid of dying. I wondered if this form was an enormous white shark. But no because so didn't looked like. '' But then, what that could well be ?'' I thought. So much that I was scared, I didn't know : I wanted escape. But water was slowed me. I heard far the movements and the cries of children on the beach : I was already swimming too far. I had only a one choice : do face to face t this thing. I opened greatly my eyes for observe everything around me. When, suddenly, I seen a big white dolphin. It following me. Surprise, I rushed on the beach. ''
1) Corriger grammaticalement ce texte (oubli/ordre des mots, forme verbale adéquate...)
- la forme verbale adéquate,
- utiliser le prétérit simple à bon escient,
- utiliser le prétérit Be-ing à bon escient.
2) Ajouter au texte le superlatif et les subordonnées en When/While.
3) Corriger les phrases qui sont mal formées et la ponctuation/majuscules.
4) Ajouter des phrases en ménageant du suspense ou de l'humour pour rendre ce texte intéressant.
PS : En échange 25 points !
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It approaches increasingly. I wanted to scream, but I could not. I'm frozen there, I could not be frozen. For the first time in my life I was afraid of dying. I wonder if this form was a huge white shark but it does not look like a white shark. '' But then, what could it be? '' I thought. So I'm scared, I wanted to escape. But water slowed me down. I heard in the distance the movements and cries of children on the beach I am too far. I had to make a choice: to face this thing. I truly opened my eyes to observe everything around me. When, suddenly, I saw a great white dolphin. It helped me to reach the beach and see my family.